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Hello bloggers,

Today we had cybersmat with Gerad and we were makeovering some comments here is the one I made: 

Parekowhai class assembly

Kiora bloggers,

Today was amazing Parekowhai (our) class  assembly and we had so much fun performing . So It was on Thursday the 8th of August at Hay park school assembly hall we did some dancing , singing and some people shared their writing about the problem with plastic,the holiday homework our teacher challenged us with and Ina sharing the slides that she did with her mum about her  island which is the cook islands we also  had so much fun and I hope you enjoy my writing about our fabulous assembly.

So we started of by waiting for every class to arrive and when they all arrived the whole school sang the national anthem.We sang it so beautifully.

Next we introduced a new song to the school which was called the wake up song we had fun doing the actions and singing.

So after that Ms Campbell handed out the certificates to the students and she talked about something and we carried on.

Then we sang a song that papa Jarod taught us.Then some people shared their writing and then we finished of our assembly with the wake up song.

Here is the video we took of our assembly:

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Kiora bloggers,

Today I am going to be showing you my recommendation we did Here is myne: